Sometimes I almost dream
And I stand quiet then
In that place where death abandoned us
You talked to me of emerald dragons
And I would light up the sky one last time
To dance with you on those folded footsteps
But all I can do is walk through empty castles
As craving fashions another storm out of the ocean
And I watch you washed ashore in a billion grains of sand
The beacons of rescue have faded and failed, my love
And I know now that those who can never die
Do not strive so hard to stay alive
…heartbreak. 😦
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I know, I had to keep stopping when I wrote it because it was making me cry.
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Emotional truth – particularly love the spare language of first line and last two lines.
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Yeah those bits came in first. Don’t they always? I figure in my newbieness at poetry, that the lines a poem forms out of are like the scaffolding of a building. They hold it and shape it, but they’re not necessarily what the building ends up looking like.
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Beautifully expressed.
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Thank you so much. I’ve just looked at my blog and poetry seems to be making a bid for leadership.
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Beautiful. Great pairing with the sad image too, is this another one of your creations? 🙂
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Thanks Minelli. It indeed one of mine. It started as a doodle when I was supposed to be writing. I’m not in charge.
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Ah, that’s how it always goes.
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“And I know now that those who can never die
Do not strive so hard to stay alive” These words gave me goose flesh.
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Thanks babe.
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Gorgeous use of language and structure.
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Thank you, that’s so kind. Poetry seems to have a real life of its own, they flow like music. I always think that some of the best poets are musicians. Michael Stipe always has the capacity to make me cry.
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Love r.e.m. and yes — he is a brilliant lyricist!
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Nightswimming has got to be one of the most poetic songs ever written. Ah, I think it is an REM day today.
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qczXWXNgRdU — I love this vocal loop cover of nightswimming. The end is especially mindblowing.
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Oh wow… that’s exquisite. I love how it’s like she’s hearing it for the first time too. I like her version of Creep too, acoustic guitar rather than sampled loop, and not so gloriously uncensored as Radiohead but it’s just beautiful:
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So lovely. And lonesome. You have the gift.
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What a sweet thing to say, thank you. I suspect the gift has me.
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there’s so much here
a lot of what you did
Here could stand
On its own
Simply beautiful
As always Sheldon
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Thank you Sheldon, I smile at the kindness of your poetic words 😃
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